{"id":10612,"date":"2005-05-27T21:43:40","date_gmt":"2005-05-28T01:43:40","guid":{"rendered":"http:\/\/www.mercuryranch.org\/blog\/2005\/05\/27\/84168-of-90336\/"},"modified":"2025-04-20T13:27:45","modified_gmt":"2025-04-20T18:27:45","slug":"twilight-revision-84168-of-90336","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/jeanschara.com\/pmtoo\/twilight-revision-84168-of-90336\/","title":{"rendered":"Twilight Revision: 84,168 of 90,336"},"content":{"rendered":"

It’s getting closer to the end of the first pass. I’ll probably finish that tomorrow morning. Then I will begin applying what I’m learning from Self Editing for Fiction Writers<\/strong> from the beginning. As you may recall, I recommended this book awhile back. I applied some of what I learned at the tail end of my first pass of Twilight<\/strong>, and I was amazed at how much sense it made.<\/p>\n

For the first time, adverbs began to look out of place (how long have I been hearing adverbs needed to be slashed mercilessly?). After reading this book, I finally understood why <\/em>I should slash adverbs, so I could bring myself to do it.<\/p>\n

In a similar vein, I understand why it’s OK and even preferable to use said <\/em>instead of other dialog tags. Or even why a dialog tag may be redundant.<\/p>\n

From 2YN First Five Pages critiques, I have a better understanding of WHY my opening doesn’t work. One alternative is to start the book at the chronological beginning, but that involves a couple embarking on an illicit affair (are there licit affairs, or is that like jumbo shrimp?) and graphic sex. I’m not certain that’s the proper opening for a book either. But doing it in a flashback scene later on isn’t good either.<\/p>\n

I still have to apply Zette’s recent 2YN lessons as well. All this and more are what I get to ponder on this next pass. How many times do I do a One-Pass Revision? Until I’m comfortable the product is readable. Right now, it isn’t even close. But it’s leaps and bounds better than the first draft.<\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"

It’s getting closer to the end of the first pass. I’ll probably finish that tomorrow morning. Then I will begin applying what I’m learning from Self Editing for Fiction Writers from the beginning. As you may recall, I recommended this book awhile back. I applied some of what I learned …<\/span> Continue reading →<\/span><\/a><\/p>\n","protected":false},"author":1,"featured_media":0,"comment_status":"open","ping_status":"open","sticky":false,"template":"","format":"standard","meta":{"_jetpack_memberships_contains_paid_content":false,"footnotes":"","jetpack_publicize_message":"","jetpack_publicize_feature_enabled":true,"jetpack_social_post_already_shared":true,"jetpack_social_options":{"image_generator_settings":{"template":"highway","default_image_id":0,"font":"","enabled":false},"version":2}},"categories":[49,4],"tags":[],"class_list":["post-10612","post","type-post","status-publish","format-standard","hentry","category-twilight","category-writing"],"jetpack_publicize_connections":[],"jetpack_featured_media_url":"","jetpack_likes_enabled":true,"jetpack_sharing_enabled":true,"_links":{"self":[{"href":"https:\/\/jeanschara.com\/pmtoo\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/10612","targetHints":{"allow":["GET"]}}],"collection":[{"href":"https:\/\/jeanschara.com\/pmtoo\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts"}],"about":[{"href":"https:\/\/jeanschara.com\/pmtoo\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/types\/post"}],"author":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/jeanschara.com\/pmtoo\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/users\/1"}],"replies":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/jeanschara.com\/pmtoo\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/comments?post=10612"}],"version-history":[{"count":1,"href":"https:\/\/jeanschara.com\/pmtoo\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/10612\/revisions"}],"predecessor-version":[{"id":16239,"href":"https:\/\/jeanschara.com\/pmtoo\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/10612\/revisions\/16239"}],"wp:attachment":[{"href":"https:\/\/jeanschara.com\/pmtoo\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/media?parent=10612"}],"wp:term":[{"taxonomy":"category","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/jeanschara.com\/pmtoo\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/categories?post=10612"},{"taxonomy":"post_tag","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/jeanschara.com\/pmtoo\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/tags?post=10612"}],"curies":[{"name":"wp","href":"https:\/\/api.w.org\/{rel}","templated":true}]}}