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Zoo — 3 Comments

  1. I love this except for one thing. The constant shift in sentence time is a little jarring. Since you have to have the thoughts in present tense, you might want to adjust the rest of the text to present tense too. At least whenever you are in the polar bear’s POV. Hurry up and get this published. I really, really want to read this story.

    • I’m still on lesson 17 of HTRYN with this one. Hoping to wrap that up soon and get back to making forward progress again. I appreciate the feedback on tense and will take a look at it.

  2. Ah! Ah! Ah! This is it!

    So exciting!

    Your character is so zen about everything. I’d be throwing nine kinds of fits, but then, I’m not a polar bear.

    What is Mindy’s motivation?