Took out a few words and added a few words today. I’m reading margin notes and skipping some of them–not sure how to mess with them or am not ready to yet. I’m doing the easy things on this pass. The obvious stuff. I suspect there’s way too much telling and not enough character participation in several points. In others, I’ve written Inuit to be entirely to insipid.

She says things that are entirely too, too, corny and puts up with way too much annoying stuff. She’s very rational about it in a Sesame Street sort of way. But she’s not a Sesame Street character. She’s a polar bear adjusting from life in her native land to living among these strange human creatures in Virginia (and other places). If she remains this laid back, it’s a darn good thing she got out of the Arctic. She never would have survived. She’ll be back in town around the middle of the month. Maybe she’ll have some good input on how I can fix the way I’ve butchered her story. But just maybe her memory has sugar-coated things a bit…Hmm…perhaps we have stumbled upon an unreliable narrator…noooo…that would never happen! Not old goodie four shoes Inuit. (Have I been duped?)